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krazedkat I post too much Reputation: 0
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 10:44 pm Post subject: My writing |
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Mostly persuasive/articles but I will put some creative writing up soon....
http://blog.semtro.co.cc
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hcavolsdsadgadsg I'm a spammer Reputation: 26
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 11:07 pm Post subject: |
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You need to work on keeping the flow of the writing, it reads clunky.
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DKMikey I post too much Reputation: 2
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Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 11:11 pm Post subject: |
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Many passive/be verbs, use AV verbs.
"I believe" is not exactly needed in your type of article
Grammar sucks (no offense, learn some syntax)
Use different mechanics, such as hyphens, semi-colons, dashes, but use them properly.
Other than that you have a good voice.
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krazedkat I post too much Reputation: 0
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Posted: Wed May 06, 2009 4:36 pm Post subject: |
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Isn't a hyphen a dash?
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iGod Grandmaster Cheater Reputation: -1
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Posted: Wed May 06, 2009 5:14 pm Post subject: |
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KrazedkatŠ wrote: | Isn't a hyphen a dash? |
"-" Hyphen, "/" Dash or Slash
Well at least were i come from...
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Phixen I post too much Reputation: 0
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Posted: Wed May 06, 2009 5:57 pm Post subject: |
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Dash:
--punctuation mark: a short horizontal line used as a punctuation mark, often in place of a comma or colon, or as a sign that certain letters or words have been omitted
Hyphen:
-- dash showing word break: a punctuation mark (-) used at the end of a line when a word must be divided, or to link elements in a compound word or phrase
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krazedkat I post too much Reputation: 0
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Posted: Wed May 06, 2009 6:02 pm Post subject: |
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/= slash ALWAYS NOT dash... -.-
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